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describe the life cycle of a frog from the process

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The presented graph illustrates the life cycle of a
frog
, starting from the eggs into the
adult
frog
.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the stages can be divided based on the environments,
such
 as the underwater stage and the
above water
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above-water
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 stage. In general, there are five developments
happen
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that happen
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 underwater.
Firstly
, the eggs will grow into
embryo
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embryos
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.
Next,
the embryo will evolve into a tadpole. In these three stages, the
frog
 does not have
leg
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legs
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 yet. Only after several
period
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periods
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 of
times
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time
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, the front legs will appear. Once the legs appear, the pulmonary starts to be developed, enabling the
frog
 to
breath
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breathe
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 in the air. After the
frog
 has
a
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apply
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pulmonary breathing, the cycle will continue above the water. At
this
 stage, the
frog
's organs have been fully developed but
has
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have
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 not grown into the
adult
 phase yet. It will remain as
tadpole
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a tadpole
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frog
 until growing into an
adult
 size.
Then
,
this
adult
frog
 will lay eggs in the water and the cycle will start again.
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introduction conclusion present
Provide a clear introduction and conclusion. While the introduction sets the stage, a distinct conclusion rounds off the response effectively. In your essay, the conclusion is missing, which affects the overall structure.
logical structure
Enhance the logical structure by clearly organizing the ideas with a more systematic approach to improve the readability and flow.
supported main points
Expand upon main points by providing more detailed explanations, comparisons, or implications to strengthen the argument.
complete response
Ensure a complete response by fully addressing all parts of the task. Elaborate on each stage more thoroughly and connect them to the overall life cycle process.
clear comprehensive ideas
Continue to develop clear and comprehensive ideas but strive to explain them in more depth, such as the significance of each life stage of a frog and the transitions between them.
relevant specific examples
Incorporate more relevant and specific examples to support your descriptions. These examples provide clarity and depth to your response.

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