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rental or own house. adavantages and disadvantages

#house #adavantages
In
these
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 present day as all
people
 konwn that to be own
the
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a
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property
 is not easy as
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the economic
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economic
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economy
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 is not boom as
bofore
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before
,
On the other hand
 leasing
the
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an
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 apartment to live either priceless was increased in every year. Both topics
was
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had
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 advantages and
drawback
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drawbacks
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. First of all,
Own
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Owning
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the
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apply
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property
 is efficiently
benefit
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beneficial
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for
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to
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 those
people
 who are
belogist
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biologists
biologist
. Stability and performance, Freedom
on
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of
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 customization, and potential for eviction.
However
, owning the house
also
need
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needs
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 to
considered
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consider
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about
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apply
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the
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apply
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maintanance
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maintenance
 and responsibilities,
property
 taxes and high
upon
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apply
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cost
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costs
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.
For example
, Real estate and
morgates
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mortgages
.
person
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a person
the person
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 who
are
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is
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 taking
property
 and any houses need to
pying
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paying
 tax and
morgate
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mortgage
 for looking after.
Altough
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Although
,
reparing
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repairing
preparing
resposibilities
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responsibilities
 and once the
property
was damages
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was damaged
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.
on the other hand
, advantages
for
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of
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 renting,
relocating
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and relocating
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 with flexibility.
People
 would not
paying
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pay
be paying
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 any cost for access to amenities. In spite of
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the benefit
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benefit
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benefits
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 either
drawback
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drawbacks
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 price of rent
being
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apply
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fluctuateion and
restriction
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restrictions
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 on customization.
For instance
, Once
people
are decided
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decide
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 to rent a
property
 they have
thinking
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to think
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 about sharing with
other
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others
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,
accomadation
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accommodation
,
restriction
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restrictions
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 and equity of
building
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the building
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.
To conclude
, rental and
own
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owning
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property
 both they are
benefit
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benefits
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 and
drawback
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drawbacks
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. As they said onwing the house
is
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has
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 more advantages
on
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of
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 tax
benefit
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benefits
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,
freedom
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and freedom
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.
Nevertheless
,
costing
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the cost
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for
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of
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 reparing responsibilities.
On the other hand
 rental
individauly
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individually
individual
benefit
 and
such
 as financial,
Morgates
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Mortgages
. but still
drawback
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drawbacks such
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 as
restriction
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restrictions
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 and rent fluctuation.
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coherence cohesion
The essay attempts to discuss the advantages and disadvantages of owning versus renting a property, but the logical structure is weak, and the essay lacks clear paragraphs that separate and categorize ideas effectively. Improvements can be made by constructing well-organized paragraphs with clear topic sentences that guide the reader through the argument.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, but they are not sufficiently clear or impactful. The conclusion especially should succinctly summarize the main points made in the essay. To improve, consider starting the essay with a clearer statement of intent and ending with a stronger, concise summary that encapsulates the overall argument.
task achievement
The essay partially addresses the task, but the ideas require further development and specific examples to adequately cover the topic. Additionally, the essay would benefit from a more systematic approach to discussing each side of the argument—identifying clear advantages and disadvantages for both owning and renting. More real-world examples would also help to illustrate and support the points made.

Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Equity
  • Mortgage
  • Tenure
  • Real estate
  • Appreciation/Depreciation
  • Property taxes
  • Landlord
  • Tenant
  • Lease agreement
  • Down payment
  • Homeowners association (HOA) fees
  • Appreciation/Depreciation
  • Foreclosure
  • Asset
  • Liability
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