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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The presented pie charts and table provide a comprehensive overview of the
the
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policy
budget
 for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. It is evident that for 2017 and 2018,
National
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 Government were the primary source for
budget
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the budget
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 and the most expenditure of the
budget
come
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to
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from
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salary
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salaries
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 for officers and staff.
Its
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 clear from the table that the highest amount of money
earn come
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 slightly stable from
National
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the National
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 Government, during
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a
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that periods
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for
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of
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 175,5m
at
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 2017 and 177,8m
at
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in
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 2018. Local taxes
following as
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second
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the second
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 source of
budget
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the budget
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that
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 has a significant development amount from 91.2m
at
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in
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 2017
then
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and then
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increase
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 around 10
point
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 by 102.3m.
However
, other sources took part as less than 15%
from
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 the total sources. Interestingly as
showed
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at
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 the pie chart, how the
budget
 spent accounted
significant
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 for salaries to officers and staff,
for
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75%
at
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in
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 2017 and 69%
at
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 2018. Meanwhile,
building’s
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 spending at the same amount for the
periods
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period
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 by 17%.
In contrast
, the least expenditure was only 8 % and 14%, respectively for Technology.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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