The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
The presented pie charts and table provide a comprehensive overview of the
the
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policy
budget
for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. It is evident that for 2017 and 2018,
National
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Government were the primary source for
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and the most expenditure of the
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to
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salary
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for officers and staff.
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clear from the table that the highest amount of money
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slightly stable from
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Government, during
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that periods
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for
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175,5m
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2017 and 177,8m
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2018. Local taxes
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second
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source of
budget
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has a significant development amount from 91.2m
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2017
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around 10
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by 102.3m.
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the total sources. Interestingly as
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the pie chart, how the
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spent accounted
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for salaries to officers and staff,
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75%
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2017 and 69%
at
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2018. Meanwhile,
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spending at the same amount for the
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by 17%.
In contrast
, the least expenditure was only 8 % and 14%, respectively for Technology.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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