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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbian island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbian island between 2010 and 2017.
The line graph displays the
number
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 of
visitors
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 in a specific Caribbean
Island
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 from 2010 to 2017 which were divided into
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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 and those who were staying on the
island
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.
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that during the
period
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 given, the total
number
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 of people visiting Caribbean
Island
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 consistently increased except for the total
number
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 of
visitors
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 between 2015 and 2016. At the start of the
period
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on the
island
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 was greater than that of staying on
cruise
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ships
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.
However
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,
at the end
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 of the
period
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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 surpassed those who were staying on the
island
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. On the one hand, from 2010 to 2011, there were around 0.75
million
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visitors
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 on the
island
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 before going up to just below 1,5
million
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 in 2012.
Furthermore
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, between 2013 and 2015, the
number
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 remained stable at 1,5
million
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 before decreasing back to just below 1,5
million
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. Eventually,
at the end
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 of the
period
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, it rose again to exactly 1,5
million
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visitors
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.
On the other hand
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,
although
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 starting the
period
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 with approximately 0,25
million
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visitors
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 in 2010, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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 was precisely 0,5
million
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 people in 2011. It
then
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 went down back to 0,25
million
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 people in 2012 before increasing gradually to 2
million
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 in 2017 which was 0,5
million
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 above that of staying on the
island
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, island, cruise, ships, period, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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