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Children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

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Over time, it is commonly acknowledged that foreign
language
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 is significant. At the same time, many people start to
confuse
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whether
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children
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 studying a foreign
language
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 in secondary
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 is
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superior than they learn it in primary
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. Undeniably, it is widely believed that most
children
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 who are in secondary
school
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 have a better intellect and comprehension to acquire
knowledge
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 of
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.
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 could be attributed to older
children
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 already having learned
knowledge
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 of the original
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 many years
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 as spelling and grammar.
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, they ought to discover some method which is the rule of learning
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,
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 as the method of memorizing vocabulary.
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,if older
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 learn a new
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 by using their experience of learning and some ways, it might be more efficient. On the one hand, most
children
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 who study in secondary schools learn foreign languages more quickly than primary
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students
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. The biggest benefit of studying other languages in primary
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 is new
language
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 might motivate
students
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'
brain
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 growth in the presence of their ages.
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 means is learning a foreign
language
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 is good for
children
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's brains, especially for young
children
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. An account of
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 is in the process of learning a new
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. Primary
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students
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 are more likely to stimulate the number of
brain
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 cells and trigger more sensitive
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 nerves.
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, in China, research has shown primary
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students
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 who already have studied fundamental English have a superior ability to understand and application of
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 when they study in senior high schools. What's more,
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 phenomenon could be reflected in other subjects,
such
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 as math and biology.
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, from a physiological aspect,
students
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 who are in primary schools could reinforce their concentration through learning a foreign
language
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. To be specific,
students
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 ought to pay attention to
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the details
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 and rules of languages when they learn a new
language
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.
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, English is the main subject for Chinese
students
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. Primary
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students
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 need to learn the basic
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 of English,
such
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 as word formation and analysis of word meanings, when they do these things, their concentration is
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 improved. Taking all these factors into consideration, it seems to me that I agree with
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 topic that the benefits of learning foreign in primary
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students
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'
brain
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 development, including the formation of nerve connections,
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 memories and concentration are increased.
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 is really good for
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' growth and cognition development.
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