the graph below shows the number of tourist visiting a particular Caribbean Island between 2010 and 2017.

the graph below shows the number of tourist visiting a particular Caribbean Island between 2010 and 2017.
The line chart shown above describes the number of tourists visiting a Caribbean Island from 2010 to 2017. There were two categories based on the accommodation, whether visitors staying on cruise ships, symbolized by a rectangle; or on an island, drawn by a triangle. Another line was the total amount of guests every year. Generally, the total number of tourists was increasing, except there was a stable score of 2.75
million
in 2015 and 2016,
then
rose to topmost until 3.5
million
in 2017. Categorizing it from their stay, from 2010 to 2015, most foreigners preferred to stop over the liner rather than on the ground,
however
, in 2016 and 2017, the archipelago was chosen the most. The floating hotel passengers were steady at first at 0.75
million
from 2010 to 2011,
then
went up slowly until 2013, hitting the plateau once more in 1.5
million
to 2015. There was a slight reduction in 2016,
although
it followed by being back again to 1.5
million
in 2017.
On the other hand
, the conventional hotel started with fluctuation from 2010 to 2013, going back and forth between 0.25 to 0.5
million
,
then
followed by a constant upsurge until the end and
finally
peaked at 2
million
.
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