In ancient times, major population thrived in a small communities where everyone knew each other. In these days, most of the people live in urban areas such as capital cities and are not much aware of other people around them. What were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small communities?
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of
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people
tended to live in a small population, in the past, when everyone had a smaller circle of acquaintances. However
, nowadays, people
living in bigger cities prefer to be individualism
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miggling
with each other. Some debats that Correct your spelling
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is
still needed in order to discuss Change the verb form
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this
issue.
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, being an anti-social person for introvert
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people
becomes the best option to stay insane. Living in a small communities
makes everyone know each other which can be tiring for individualists. In regard to Fix the agreement mistake
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this
reason, being a suburban dweller bring
more disadvantages for them. Correct subject-verb agreement
brings
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, some introvert
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people
think that less socializing make
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others
. Imagine how will they manage their mind when he is pushed to Change to a singular noun
other
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mingle
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their
neighbors
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drawbacks
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people
.
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being sub-urban
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bring
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disadavantages
, the benefits of living in smaller communities can not be denied. Correct your spelling
disadvantages
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, some people
hate to feel lonely and be abandoned in the community. In suburb
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other and Change preposition
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thinks
that everyone is their family when they live in a neighborhood. Correct subject-verb agreement
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example, when we live in a bigger city, it can be guaranteed that even living Change preposition
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in
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on
a
same floor in an apartment, we do not know most of our neighbors.
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, even some
urban Correct word choice
though some
people
tend to live alone in a big city, some people
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bring
more benefits Correct subject-verb agreement
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