Some people say that t is necessary to use animals for testing medicines intended for human use. Others, however, think it is cruel and uncessary. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Since a couple of years ago, many cosmetic industries and medical institutes started to
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animals
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with the aim of testing the quality and side effects of their
products
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, sparking many debates.
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some believe it is definitely necessary, others consider it as animal
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. To my mind,
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it is vital to examine a product completely,
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it could be done
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way
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of using
animals
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. Considering
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the negative considerations, some
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which are produced for the first time may have numerous downsides, causing excruciating pains or even death to
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.
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, these species are kept in utterly bad
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within the period they are used for experiments. So, they spend all their longevity
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pain and sickness.
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, some laboratories decide
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animal in terms of testing a special kind of medicine namely those
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suitable for eyes;
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in blindness in some cases.
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because, some activists are trying to stop these kinds of experiments, regarding it as an obvious form of ignoring
animals
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.
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, it is absolutely undeniable
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crucial to examine
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before
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. In more detail, if
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of a medicine outweigh the advantages, not only it does not cure the illnesses, it poses new problems. But, in our modern world thanks to new technologies and developments there are many better ways to detect the pros and cons of medicines exactly; so that there is no need to
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animals
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, there are loads and bunches of health
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including facial
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which are not possible to evaluate
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by manipulating creatures. In conclusion,
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the product assessment in both aspects of quality and unwanted impacts plays a vital role, I suppose to achieve
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goal it is more logical and moral to
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modernised methods
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of using
animals
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.
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