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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages fir young people who decide to do this.

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Youngsters
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 to do some job to get experience but some people believe that they should travel and enjoy their spare
time
 before
further
 studies. I will describe some pros
as well as
 challenges
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 by young adults. On the
one
 hand, it is true that it is beneficial for students to get social exposure by doing any sort of work.
For instance
, if
one
 begins their internship at an art gallery to establish skills to become a great artist in the future
then
 it would definitely
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wonderful experience for
one
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.
Furthermore
, taking a break for
one
 year gives
individual
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 enough
time
 to actually think about their career choice and travelling as well. Many people think that young ones will get some acknowledgement through various positions of employment,
such
 as boost their hidden talents and it can
also
 bring them ideas of what their future aim to be. On the flip side, break sessions
while
 travelling are refreshing and comforting. It brings the students out from their hectic routine but excessive indulgence in spending
time
 through travel and enjoyment would lead them to be less motivated and productive.
Also
, some of them
stuck
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 at a point with no advancement of career goals and forget their purpose in getting into university. In conclusion, a gap year is both beneficial and harmful for young people. It helps them learn more necessary skills and have the right direction for the future but it
also
 wastes
time
 and causes them to lose motivation to study. In my view, a gap year is a good choice if the young think clearly and plan carefully before deciding to do
this
.
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