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The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#information #challenges #people #face #countries #▪️summarise #features #comparisons
The bar graph provides information about 3 different integration challenges faced
for
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people
 who go live abroad. Three age groups were considered in
this
analyses
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. Concerning the challenge related to learning
local
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the local
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 language, more than half of
population
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the population
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 over 55 years old suffered
with
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this
 aspect, which is represented by 54%.
On the other hand
, 29% of
young
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 population around 18-34 years old struggled with the learning process. Other aspects observed in the graph were making friends and finding somewhere to live. Elder
people
 considerably suffered less the other groups. Just 22%
them
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has
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have
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 difficulties in finding a place to live and 23%
suffered
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making
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from making
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 friends.
However
, 18-34 and 35-54 groups showed more than 36% facing these integration challenges.
Overall
, young
people
had easiness learning
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local
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a local
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 language when they move abroad, despite
of
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apply
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living
hardship
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in hardship
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 in other aspects.
In contrast
 to elderly
people
, who had rough times speaking a new language.
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