The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the consumption of typical meals’ nutrients including
sodium
, saturated fat and added sugar
which are affected
negatively for human consumption in the USA.
Verb problem
apply
Overall
, United States residents tend to use similar
proportion of nutrients mentioned above in their breakfast, lunch, dinner, and snacks. Add an article
a similar
the similar
However
, the consumption of sodium
and saturated fat are
more allocated in dinner.
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
First,
in terms of breakfast fast, sodium
and saturated fats are less consumed than other meals which are 19 percent
and 21 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
respectively, Change the spelling
per cent
however
, the usage of added sugar
is accounted
for 42 Replace the word
accounts
percent
which is 2 times higher than sugars in other meals. Change the spelling
per cent
Moreover
, The
US citizens tend to use Correct article usage
apply
snack
with less Fix the agreement mistake
snacks
sugar
at 16 percent
which is the lowest Change the spelling
per cent
sugar
usage compared to other
three meals.
Correct article usage
the other
Secondly
, the proportion of sodium
in lunch is 29 percent
, which is the highest nutrient compared to Change the spelling
per cent
other
two unhealthy substances, Correct article usage
the other
however
, lunch is the healthiest choice for the people of US
. Correct article usage
the US
Conversely
, dinner is accounted
for most unhealthy food which Replace the word
accounts
include
43 Change the verb form
includes
percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
sodium
, 37 percent
of saturated fat, and 23 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
of added Change the spelling
per cent
sugar
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, sugar, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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