The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the consumption of typical meals’ nutrients including
sodium
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, saturated fat and added
sugar
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which
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negatively for human consumption in the USA.
Overall
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, United States residents tend to use
similar
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proportion of nutrients mentioned above in their breakfast, lunch, dinner, and snacks.
However
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, the consumption of
sodium
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and saturated fat
are
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is
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more allocated in dinner.
First,
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in terms of breakfast fast,
sodium
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and saturated fats are less consumed than other meals which are 19
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percent
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and 21
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percent
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per cent
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respectively,
however
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, the usage of added
sugar
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is
accounted
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for 42
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percent
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per cent
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which is 2 times higher than sugars in other meals.
Moreover
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,
The
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US citizens tend to use
snack
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snacks
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with less
sugar
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at 16
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percent
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per cent
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which is the lowest
sugar
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usage compared to
other
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the other
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three meals.
Secondly
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, the proportion of
sodium
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in lunch is 29
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percent
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per cent
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, which is the highest nutrient compared to
other
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the other
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two unhealthy substances,
however
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, lunch is the healthiest choice for the people of
US
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the US
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.
Conversely
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, dinner is
accounted
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accounts
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for most unhealthy food which
include
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includes
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43
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percent
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per cent
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of
sodium
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, 37
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percent
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per cent
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of saturated fat, and 23
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percent
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per cent
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of added
sugar
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, sugar, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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