More and more people want to buy clothes, cars and other items with famous brands. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative development?
There is an increasing number of
people
who want to buy expensive or higher-branded products
. These are highly qualified and honored
rather than simply fast fashion Change the spelling
honoured
clothes
or products
. I think this
is a positive development
because these superior goods can be used for a long time, contributing to eco-friendly practice
in our consumer-driven era.
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practices
Firstly
, Individuals with sufficient income often tend to use luxury brands, as they are more qualified than cheaper products
. Luxury products
are of good quality
and last
for a long time. Therefore
, some consumers tend to buy widely known brand
items
. For example
, my mother prefers to wear Gobi cashmere clothes
which is famous
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a famous
the famous
brand
of Mongolia because the products
of Gobi are softer and more fashionable than other cashmere factories’ clothes
. Skilled professionals, such
as designers or engineers, usually work for reputable organizations, making more valuable products
. Moreover
, using expensive products
or clothes
can influence a person's social status. Items
from famous brands are normally expensive and can only be afforded by those with sufficient income. Therefore
, people
believe that utilizing such
prestigious brands enhances their reputation, potentially impacting their careers or business
.
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businesses
Secondly
, using high
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high-quality
quality
products
is a positive development
because, despite of
its price is high, Change preposition
apply
this
is a positive development
as it is more beneficial for the environment, which has been seriously polluted by human activities. Moreover
, there are huge recycling problems all over the world, consuming unqualified items
, using
fast fashion Correct word choice
and using
clothes
are main
resources of Correct article usage
the main
this
issue. If people
opt for quality
products
, overall
consumption will decrease because of their quality
and fashion. In contrast
, those cheaper products
are rising
an issue of recycling, especially in poorer countries, lacking adequate landfilling or recycling infrastructure. Correct your spelling
raising
Consequently
, everyone should be aware that consuming unnecessary cheap items
is harmful to our environment, as most of them are made with dangerous chemical materials. For instance
, the disposal from
old cheap vehicle motors is an emerging problem in our world polluting soil and air with hazardous chemical emissions.
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of
To conclude
, well-known brand
items
are guaranteed for
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to
long lasting
, and the definition of individuals’ social status. Add a hyphen
long-lasting
This
trend seems to me
Correct your spelling
be
positive
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a positive
development
because there is an issue of recycling waste products
in our world. If people
often use famous brand
products
, the usage from individual
will decrease which would be Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
benefitted
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beneficial
for
our environment.Change preposition
to
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Elaborate on the negative aspects of the trend to represent a balanced view before reaching a conclusion.
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