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the graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas

the graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas
#differences #wheat #exports #three #areas
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The line chart illustrates the
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amount
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number
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 of
wheats
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wheat
kinds of wheat
ears of wheat
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which
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apply
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exported
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were exported
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 in three areas
with
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apply
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for 5 years from 1985 to 1990.
Overall
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, Canada
was
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had
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 the highest
amount
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 at the beginning, but
European
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the European
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 Community did the
last
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 period.
Initially
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, the highest
amount
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 of wheat exports
were
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was
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 taken by Canada at almost 20
million
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, followed by European Community and Australia at 17.5 and 15
million
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, in a row. In the following
year
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, only
Australian
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Australians
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whose
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who
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 consumed wheat increased
at
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to
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 16
million
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.
However
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, after that, Australia had a downtrend experience in which
the
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apply
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last
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year
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 it occupied the
last
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 stage at slightly over 10
million
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. Eventually, in 1986,
European
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the European
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 country was the
last
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amount
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 of wheat export at almost 18
million
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, but the
last
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 period it showed a reverse accounting for over 20
million
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. Interestingly, in 1988 Canada commanded the
amount
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 of exports all over the
year
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 at 25
million
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, but the next
year
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 it dramatically dropped
at
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to
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 under 15
million
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,
while
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 the following
year
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 it climbed
at
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to
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 almost 20
million
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, million, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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