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Ambition is a positive quality for people to have in society today. How important is it for people who want to succeed in life? Is it a positive or negative characteristic?

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It is alleged that ambition is considered
of
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 the most important features
in
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human
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 lifestyle. The welcoming aspect of that can
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influence
individuals
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individuals'
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 life on account of people's thirst for success
as well as
 its delighted impact on their
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social
 and personal life. There are a
myraid
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myriad
 of
factores
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factors
factories
involves
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ones
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fulfillness
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fulfilled
 including
ambitouse
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ambitious
 in
acheiving
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achieving
 and working.
This
 will help them to
persue
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pursue
the
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 goals. Aiming
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for perfection
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perfection
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, folks strive to follow the idea of gaining more and more. Their skills,
likewise
, would potentially increase to reach the turning point and
climbe
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climbed
climb
 the
ceerar
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career
lader
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ladder
.
In addition
, ambition plays a
pivital
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pivotal
 role in the way of changing
people
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people's
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 attitudes and
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 them into the
one
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ones
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 who can
upcome
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up come
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 the
berriers
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barriers
berries
as well as
meature
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measure
mature
feature
 them. The basis of
feeling
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 of
ambitouse
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ambitious
 seems to make a big difference in
behavier
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behaviour
 and personality.
This
 might lead to both negative and positive views and
basically
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 it depends on each
person
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person's
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 understanding of life. From
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clear
 perspective, the changes would lead to profound success owing to the need
of achieving
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to achieve
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 goals.
However
, it is not acceptable in some cultures to manifest
this
 feature openly in social relationships. In conclusion, ambition is by far one of the most
essentail factores
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essential factors
of
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in
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 following dreams and goals
to
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for to
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whom
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who
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needs
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need
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 to become
successfull
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successful
.
Moreover
, the way it
effects
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affects
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 people
is vary
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 and stems from their background personality.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea that corresponds to the overall structure of the essay. Avoid unrelated digressions.
coherence cohesion
Include a clear introductory paragraph that sets the topic and a concluding paragraph that summarizes the main points and gives a definitive stance.
coherence cohesion
Support your arguments with specific examples or clear arguments that demonstrate how ambition can be positive or negative, depending on context.
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Stay focused on the essay question throughout your response, addressing both aspects of the prompt: the importance of ambition for success, and its positive and negative characteristics.
task achievement
Engage with the prompt fully by exploring the implications and consequences of ambition being a positive or negative quality within society.
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Use a greater range of vocabulary and sentence structures to articulate your ideas more clearly and comprehensively.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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