The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the change in the
number
of
shops
that closed and opened in a country throughout the
period
between 2011 and 2018. The amounts of
shops closure
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shop closures
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went slightly down throughout the
period
, starting from more than 6,500
since
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in
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2011 to around 5,000 in 2018. The figures fluctuated with a peak at more than 7,000 in 2013,
however
, after that, the
number
went down and plummetted to
lowest
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the lowest
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at 800 in 2015. The opening
shops
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shop's
shops'
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number
decreased from the highest at 8,500
,
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to less than 4,000 in the following year, but the figure climbed up to around 6,000 in 2014, reaching the same
number
of shop
closure
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closures
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of
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in
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the year. After that, the
opening
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number of opening
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shops
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shop's
shops'
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amount dropped again, ending at 3,000 in 2018,
although
the
number
of opening
stores
remained steady for 2 years
during
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from
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2015 to 2017 at around 4,000.
Overall
,
number
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a number
the number
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of
stores
opening and closing both dropped during the
period
from 2011 to 2018, where the closing
stores
were more than opening
stores
in most years, except for the
period
from 2014 to 2016.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops, period, stores with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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