Environmental problems are becoming a global issue. Some people believe that individuals should be responsible for solving environmental issues, while others believe it is the government's responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In these modern days, environmental
problem
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become a serious issue that cannot be ignored by everyone. When it comes to how to deal with
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obstacle, there is an ongoing debate
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about whether
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individuals or
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government
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governments
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have the obligation to overcome these matters,
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I believe it is everyone's responsibility. First of all, there is no doubt that earth is
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homeland we live in, so we have responsibilities to protect it.
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Government
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The government
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should promote environmental awareness to
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the public
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by
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camp
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or speech about
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topic.
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, an eco-friendly activity can be conducted so that participants can learn information
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as
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principle - recycle, reduce and reuse.
Public
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will have
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to
know
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more about
greenhouse
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the greenhouse
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effect, global warming and
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the effect
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of climate change. Recently, deforestation, illegal fishing and pollution activities have been carried out and affected our earth critically. In these cases,
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government
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the government
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should impose
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taxes
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to punish those people and help to decrease
environment
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threats. As an individual, the contribution we can dedicate is limited, but many a little makes a mickle. There
have
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many activities that we can do in our daily
life
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,
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such as saving
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water,
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carpooling
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and
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in eco-friendly events.
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, we can take part in beach cleaning
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to pick
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up trashes
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along the seaside to protect our ocean and marine life.
By reducing
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air pollution, we can take a carpool to work or school,
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which
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helps to reduce carbon dioxide emissions. As a parent, we need to teach our kids about environmental knowledge and
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we
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must set an example for them. School
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plays a vital role in these issues, moral
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values
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and environmental
topic
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can be
teached
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taught
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in school to promote awareness among students.
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, they can learn to tackle since they
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small. Taking everything into a nutshell, earth
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belongs
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to everyone, as an environmentalist, we have
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an obligation
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to protect our homeland no matter
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government
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the government
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or individuals. One tree cannot make a forest, humans need to collaborate to solve these problems.
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Task Achievement
Your essay does indeed address both views on environmental problem-solving responsibilities and presents your own opinion. However, the development of that opinion could be further elaborated with more nuanced arguments and critical thinking to achieve a better score in Task Achievement.
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The essay has a logical structure, and you make use of cohesive devices to link your ideas. However, the introduction and conclusion could be stronger and better signal the main points and summary of the arguments for enhanced effectiveness.
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