To what extent do you agree with this statement: 'Social media has had a negative impact on society'

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introduction conclusion present
Your introduction should clearly address the question and outline the areas you will discuss. Try structuring it with a clear thesis statement that reflects your position. Also, enhance the introduction and conclusion by making your stance more explicit, offering a brief overview of the arguments to follow, and summarizing the main points effectively.
supported main points
The essay's points must be well-supported with relevant examples and explanations. To achieve this, expand on each argument with specific examples or data, rather than making broad, unsupported statements.
logical structure
Ensure each paragraph flows logically to the next one. Use cohesive devices accurately and appropriately to connect ideas, and organize paragraphs around one main idea each for better clarity.
complete response
Fully address all parts of the task, ensuring you answer the question directly and completely. Offer a balanced discussion and a complete argument, rather than a list of negative impacts. You should also consider discussing potential positive impacts of social media to provide a more nuanced response.
clear comprehensive ideas
Develop your ideas fully to ensure clarity and depth of understanding. Avoid sweeping statements and strive for clear analysis and argumentation throughout your essay. As this will demonstrate a comprehensive treatment of the topic.
relevant specific examples
Use a wider range of relevant, specific examples to support your claims. Consider drawing from current events, studies, or personal experiences that precisely illustrate the points you are making.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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