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The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.
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amount
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 of
money
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 spent on
books
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 in
Germany
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,
France
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, Italy and
Austria
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 between 1995 and 2005.
Overall
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, in all years
Germany
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 spent the highest
amount
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 of
money
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 on
books
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. As can clearly be seen,
Initially
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Germany
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 spent the highest
amount
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 of
money
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 on
books
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(80
million
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dollars
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),
whereas
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Austria
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 spent the least
amount
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 of
money
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 on
books
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 accounting for 30
million
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dollars
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. The amounts of
money
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 spent on
books
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 in Italy and
France
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 were pretty similar accounting for 50
million
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dollars
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 and 55
million
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dollars
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 respectively. From 1995 to 1997 the
amount
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 of
money
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 spent on
books
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 in
Germany
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,
France
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, Italy and
Austria
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 rose, after 1997 the
amount
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 of
money
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 spent on
books
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 in
Germany
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,
France
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 and
Austria
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 continued rising,
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however
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 it started to decrease in Italy. In 2001
Germany
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 spent the highest
amount
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 of
money
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 on
books
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(a little less than 80 ,
million
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dollars
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 ) and
Austria
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 spent the least
amount
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 of
money
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 on
books
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(40
million
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dollars
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).
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, There was an increase and in 2003 it overcame Italy. In 2005
Germany
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 spent the highest
amount
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 of
money
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 on
books
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 accounting for 95
million
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dollars
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 the least
amount
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 of
money
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 spent inlay more or less 60
millions
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million
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dollars
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, money, books, germany, france, austria, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 11 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • peak
  • trough
  • correlation
  • digital reading platforms
  • socio-economic factors
  • initiatives
  • cultural influence
  • statistical data
  • purchasing habits
  • book industry
  • consumer spending
  • educational resources
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