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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the numer of new shops that opened in one coutry between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant,

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the numer of new shops that opened in one coutry between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant,
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The line chart displays a variety of emerging
shops
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 and the
shops
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 that have gone bankrupt since the
year
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 2011 until 2008.
According to
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 the information, various
shops
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 have been shutting down since 2011 with its highest amount of closing in 2013, over 7000
shops
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 in 12 months alone.
Moreover
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, it reached its lowest in 2015 with less than 1000 entities. Regardless, it significantly
grown
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 after 2015 with over 5000 entities shut down in 2018. Moving to the opening of
shops
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 category, it started very strong with the emergence of over 8000
shops
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 in 2011.
Nonetheless
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, it did not
last
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 long with a drastic decrease
about
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of about
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 4000 quantities in the next
year
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. In the next two years,
shops
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 have been experiencing growth to 5000 in 2013 and 6000 in 2014. Over the next few years, it has gone down once again with just 3000
shops
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 opened in 2018.
Overall
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, the
year
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 2015 has
marked
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as
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apply
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a unique
year
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 with both of the categories
experienced
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experiencing
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 similar regression.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, year with synonyms.
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