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the three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980,1990 and 2000. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980,1990 and 2000. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The three pie charts illustrate the
differents
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different
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 percentage
in
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of
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spenditure
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expenditure
expenditures
 by national authorities in Someland during a period of 30 years.
overall
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,
it is clear that
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,
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apply
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the
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apply
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Higher
Education
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was
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apply
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increased the proportion of spending in 1980
and1990
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and 1990
.
While
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,
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apply
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 the proportion of spending on K-12
Education
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 and other had fallen over that period from1980 to2000.
According to
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 what
it
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is
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 shown,
expenditrue
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expenditure
expenditures
 on higher
education
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 went up from 35%
to45
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to 45
% before falling to 40% ,so it was an
overall
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increased
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increase
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 of 5%. the percentage
consuption
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consumption
 in K-12
education
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 was 25% in 1980,
while
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 it was a
propertion
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proportion
decreased
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decrease
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 of 7%. Between 1980 and 2000,
Enviromental
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Environmental
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was
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were
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 4%,5%mand9% respectively of expenditure. The percentage of spending on transportation and health and human
were fluctuated
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fluctuated
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,
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however
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however,
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 it was an
overall
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increased
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increase
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 of 6%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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