the three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980,1990 and 2000. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The three pie charts illustrate the
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percentage Correct your spelling
different
in
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of
spenditure
by national authorities in Someland during a period of 30 years.
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expenditure
expenditures
overall
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it is clear that
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Education
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was
increased the proportion of spending in 1980 Unnecessary verb
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and1990
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and 1990
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the proportion of spending on K-12 Remove the comma
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Education
and other had fallen over that period from1980 to2000.
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expenditure
expenditures
education
went up from 35% Use synonyms
to45
% before falling to 40% ,so it was an Correct your spelling
to 45
overall
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increased
of 5%. the percentage Replace the word
increase
consuption
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consumption
education
was 25% in 1980,Use synonyms
while
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propertion
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proportion
decreased
of 7%. Between 1980 and 2000, Replace the word
decrease
Enviromental
services Correct your spelling
Environmental
was
4%,5%mand9% respectively of expenditure. The percentage of spending on transportation and health and human Change the verb form
were
were fluctuated
, Change to the active voice
fluctuated
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however
it was an Add a comma
however,
overall
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increased
of 6%.Replace the word
increase
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Vocabulary: Replace the words education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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