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Topic: Spoken communication is always more powerful than written communication. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#topic #communication
Some people prefer to have
face to face
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 communication rather than chatting
in
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 social media or other applications. I strongly believe that interaction in real life
have
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most
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 advantages
such
 as
avoid
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a
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miscommunication and
can
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receiving
the
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answer
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 quickly. I will support
this
 view with arguments in the following paragraphs. First of all, talking with people directly will make conversations clear and easy to understand. It
prevent
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 misperception about the
informations
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information
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 because difference
intonation
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in intonation
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 and use of words would be fatal.
For example
,
last
 month my friend
text
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 me to
joined
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join
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 her went to library looking for
reaserch
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research
 sources, I
have been
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refused
this
 invitation because that time I felt hectic in school.
Next
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 day, I answered with "no" without adding any characters and my friend
thougt
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thought
though
 that
i
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 was mad
for
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at
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 her.
In addition
, it is important to understand the meaning
in
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of
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 conversations and spoken communication
help
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 get clear the
informations
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information
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.
Then
, have a talk immediately
help
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to help
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 individuals obtain the answers straightforwardly. There are some conditions when we need to receive fast
respond
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 from others and direct ways more required.
For instance
, sometimes we need a decision from others quickly, It is hard to handle if
this
 person
not
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 in the same area. Even
send
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 a message
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 less time but we never can
predicting
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 when the feedback
come
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. We
dont
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don't
 need
waiting
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 and feel
pressure
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pressured
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 for the reply.
To sum up
, the methods of communication in society are important when
transfer
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transferring
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informations
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information
pieces of information
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. Conversations in real life have the best qualities to prevent
the
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misunderstanding
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misunderstandings
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 and
getting
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on time
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 answers.
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coherence cohesion
Your essay lacks a clear logical structure, which makes it challenging to follow your arguments. Use clear paragraphs and transition words to guide the reader.
coherence cohesion
Although an introduction and conclusion are present, they need to be developed further to effectively signal the start and end of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your main points are fully supported with detailed explanations and more specific examples, which could enhance their impact.
task achievement
Your response partially addresses the prompt, but it needs to directly tackle the question more throughout the entire essay. Make sure each paragraph contributes clearly to the discussion of the role of spoken versus written communication.
task achievement
Ideas presented need to be articulated more clearly and comprehensively. Aim to more thoroughly explore the nuances of the topic to demonstrate a better understanding.
task achievement
It's helpful to incorporate relevant, specific examples to strengthen your arguments, but the examples given need to be developed further to better illustrate your points.

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