Famous sportsmen earn a lot more money than those in other professions. Although sport is important in our lives, everyone should be equal and such big incomes of sport professionals are unjustified. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sports
have gained increasing prominence in contemporary society due to
their significant contributions to entertainment and the promotion of healthy competition. Consequently
, becoming a popular athlete has become one of the most prominent professions in today's society. Nevertheless
, this
tendency also
provokes controversy, raising questions about the fairness of granting exorbitant salaries to renowned sports
stars.
To some degree, athletes
should receive greater salaries to offset the exorbitant costs associated with equipment. For instance
, equestrian is an extortionate sport that necessitates well-trained horses and high-quality protective gear, such
as helmets, to ensure the safety of the rider. In addition
, sports
games are regarded as high-risk activities in comparison to other occupations. Athletes
must constantly face the potential of sustaining injuries throughout each match or daily training session. It is widely recognised that engaging in intense and prolonged training often leads to significant and permanent harm to an athlete's health. Consequently
, providing athletes
with a high-profile wage would be equitable compensation for the physical toll on their health.
However
, it is important to note that enormous earnings should not be only bestowed upon well-known sports
stars, but should also
be extended to normal sportsmen to maintain fairness. Within the realm of sports
, only a select few players in particular
highly sought-after games receive substantial wages, while
others do not. For instance
, footballers and jockeys may earn millions of dollars every match, rather than on a monthly basis. However
, it is important to acknowledge that these games sometimes entail high-stakes gambling, which impacts the real earnings of players and creates a significant disparity between them and individuals in other professions. It is important to avoid such
occurrences in order to mitigate compensation disparities.
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athletes
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Athletes
should receive comparatively higher pay than white-collar workers, as long as the disparity between the typical person and well-known sports
figures is not excessively huge.Submitted by elly201559 on
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