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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million).Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million).Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table data provides information about
the
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international
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travelers
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travellers
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 in 5 different areas (Africa, America, Asia and the
pacific
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Pacific
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,
Europe
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, Middle East) in 4 diverse years. As is observed from the presented table, the
number
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 of international
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travelers
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travellers
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 increased over the period and
Europe
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 was their
favorite
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favourite
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 destination for travelling.
To begin
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 with, around 450
million
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 international
travelers
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 visited various parts of the world
initially
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 in 1990 and the
number
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 displayed a drastic surge to around 700
million
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 in 2005.
Europe
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 received the largest
number
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 of
such
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 international tourists which was more than 50% of total
travelers
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. In 1990, more than 280
million
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 tourists visited
Europe
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 out of 448.9
million
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 and
this
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number
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 reached over 400
million
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 in the end when total international
travelers
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 were about 693
million
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. America
and
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Asia and the
pacific
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Pacific
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 regions were another 2 popular destinations among international
travelers
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 and in 1990 they received approximately 80 and 60
million
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 foreigners respectively. After 15 years, the
number
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 of
travelers
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 in the Asia region experienced an upward trend to 135.8
million
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 which was higher than that of America. Africa accepted around 18
million
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 tourists in 1990 and it climbed to 28.7
million
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at the end
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 of the time.
Lastly
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, the
least
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lowest
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number
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 of international
travels
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travellers
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 visited
Middle
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the Middle
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 East region starting from 9.8
million
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 in 1990 to 15.8
million
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 in 2005.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words travelers, europe, number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International travel
  • Million
  • Trend
  • Gradual rise
  • Significant jump
  • Technological advancements
  • Increased affluence
  • Globalization
  • Rate of increase
  • Low-cost airlines
  • Ease of travel
  • Tourism promotion
  • Regional differences
  • Cultural exchange
  • Economic impact
  • Environmental concerns
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