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Nowadays more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? What are the solutions for this problem?

#people #children #life
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offspring in their later life would help them for professional success. In
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 I will delve
some
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 of the
resons
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reasons
 for
this
 and suggest some viable solutions to
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address
 the issue. First and foremost, late
pregnancy
 may
leads
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 to several
health
issues
 not only for
child
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as well as
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the mothers
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mothers
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.
In other words
, the first
pregnancy
 before 40 is recommended by
expert
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experts
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 in the medical
professionals
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.
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, As per
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the American
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Gynacologist
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Gynaecologist
Assosiation
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Association
 report late
pregnency
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pregnancy
 is one of the significant
cause
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causes
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 of gestational diabetic
melitas
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militias
 which may cause birth
issues
to
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the child
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child
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children
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.
Besides
, The couple who do not have juveniles will be isolated from their peers and society.
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Nevertheless
, there are some viable
solution
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 to tackle
this
 issue.
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need
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 more awareness to include
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childless couples
,
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 and provide the sample
privilage
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privilege
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the
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people
have
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who have
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child
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children
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.
Moreover
, the
health
aurthorities
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authorities
 may provide more awareness
campigns
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campaigns
 for
the
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health
issues
 in
the
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late
pregnancy
.
In other words
, they can encourage the
pople
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people
 to have children in early marriage life. In conclusion, late
pregnancy
 may
leads
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 to
health
issues
 and
stuggle
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struggle
 to
hangout
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hang out
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 with peers who
has
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have
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a child
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child
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children
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.
Awarness
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Awareness
 to the
socity
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society
 and
persons
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 is the perfect way to tackle
this
 issue. Governments should be responsible
to solve
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this
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issues
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