Computers are being used more and more in education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantags.

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Education is dependent on computers more than ever now and has become a usual part of studying. using computers in education has risen

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it has some benefits but

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, it can lead to some unpleasant things which will be discussed.

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, these days digital equipment is largely used in schools and it is impossible to study without it.the amount of benefits that it has for us

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need to buy school books is lessened because they can download PDFs and study on different devices and do not have to carry many heavy books with them.

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, there are subjects that can not be learned without a computer.

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, programming-related studies.

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they made studying much easier for students.

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, working a lot with digital devices has several downsides

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it can make the eyes dry and a few medical problems that are related to sight and more physical problems that came from sitting for a long time to work with them.

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, extremely relying on computers might cause problems if they burn out or even get viruses because all the information and documents might disappear and we cannot have any access to them anymore.

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, even though the damages that it causes cannot be ignored the profits of using digital equipment easily surpass the disadvantages, and can hugely raise the quality of our studies

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we need them more than ever in our life than before .

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structure

Your essay lacks clear, distinct introduction and conclusion paragraphs, which are essential for a well-structured IELTS essay. Ensure that your essay opens with a clear introduction stating the topic and your thesis and ends with a conclusion summarizing your main points and restating your thesis.

logic

While you have attempted to structure your essay into paragraphs, the logical flow between ideas could be improved. Each paragraph should clearly address either an advantage or a disadvantage and be linked with appropriate transitional phrases for better readability.

examples

Provide more specific examples to support your arguments. Examples are a powerful tool in illustrating your points and demonstrating a deeper understanding of the topic. Make sure that each main idea has at least one clear, specific example.

task response

To fully address the task, ensure that you expand on both the advantages and disadvantages equally and provide a clear personal opinion or overall statement stipulating which side outweighs the other.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

256 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

e-learning
digital literacy
online collaboration
multimedia resources
virtual classrooms
cybersecurity
pedagogy
remote learning
adaptive technology
educational inequality

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Computers are being used more and more in education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantags.

Your opinion

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people think the manufacturers and shopping malls should sell fewer packaged products while others argue that people have the responsibility to buy products with less packaging. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.