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A friend of yours is going on holiday soon and has asked you to recommend a destination. Write a letter to your friend and recommend a good place for a holiday that you have visited before.Say where you went, where you stayed, what you can do there and what the food was like.

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Hey joe, I hope you are doing well. I got your mail that you are planning a holiday soon, I would recommend you to go
New
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to New
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York
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 as I went there
last
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 summer with my parents. As you are living in Montreal, New
York
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 is just 6
hours
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6-hour
 drive from there. You should go
my
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by
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 car, as it will be convenient for you to travel between your hotel and
subway
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the subway
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 station. You should book your hotel in New Jersey; it will be much cheaper
instead
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 of booking
expensive
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an expensive
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 hotel in New
York
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. Once reaching New
York
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, you should only travel by subway as there will be a lot of traffic in
NYC
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, which will kill
your
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you
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 most of the time. You should visit
Statue
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the Statue
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 of Liberty and
Time
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Times
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 Square without a second thought, these are the main tourist attractions in
NYC
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 and they are so elegant. In
NYC
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 you will have
lot
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a lot
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 of options for eating. I would suggest you
to
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apply
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eat the Dollar pizza. You will find those on every other street in
NYC
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, and
also
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, they are very good in taste. I
wish
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hope
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 you
may
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have the best trip and don’t hesitate to call me if you have any questions. Best Regards, Dhruvil

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the letter follows a clear logical structure, with each paragraph focusing on a distinct topic, such as the recommendation of the destination, accommodation advice, travel tips, and food suggestions.
coherence cohesion
Use appropriate greetings and closings for a semi-formal letter, avoiding overly casual language such as 'Hey' and opting for a more appropriate closing instead of 'Best Regards', to match the context of the task.
task achievement
Include more specific experiences and descriptive details about the destination to enhance the task response. Mention particular places to stay, activities to enjoy, and types of food to try, as well as why you recommend them based on your personal experience.
task achievement
Adopt a semi-formal tone throughout the letter, suitable for writing to a friend while still maintaining a certain level of formality to address the task appropriately.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • picturesque
  • breathtaking
  • culturally rich
  • accommodations
  • amenities
  • local cuisine
  • adventure sports
  • historical sites
  • memorable experience
  • quaint
  • authentic
  • scenic views
  • hospitality
  • serenity
  • bustling markets
  • authentic dining experience
  • pristine
  • local delicacies
  • vibrant
  • tranquil
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