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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Each part of the essay should serve its purpose: the introduction should set the context and state the thesis, the body paragraphs should contain one main idea each supported by examples or explanations, and the conclusion should summarize the points and restate the thesis in the light of the discussion.
coherence cohesion
Aim for a clear and logical progression of ideas throughout the essay. Each paragraph should naturally follow from the one preceding it. Use a range of cohesive devices appropriately to help the reader follow your argument.
task achievement
Fully address all parts of the task. The essay should discuss both views and provide the writer's own opinion. The conclusion must align with the arguments presented in the essay and reflect the writer's stance.
task achievement
Clarify and elaborate on ideas to fully develop arguments. Avoid vague statements and ensure that your ideas are expressed comprehensively and clearly.
task achievement
Use relevant examples to support the main points. Specific examples not only illustrate the arguments but also make them more convincing to the reader.
Your opinion
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