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More and more people prefer to read e-books rather than paper books. What are the reasons for this? What problems can this cause for libraries?

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Online
books
 become more read by
people
 than printed
books
. The reason why
this
 happened
because
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is because
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 e-
books
much
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are much
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 more
convinient
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convenient
 and easier to
access
 than paper
books
.
However
, it can lead to some problems for
libraries
such
 as
less
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fewer
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 visitors and even the worst case
is
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being
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 closed permanently.
A plenty
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Plenty
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 of readers read more electronic
books
 because
the
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apply
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access
of
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to
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 digital
books
 is effortless and
free-of-charge
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free of charge
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.
People
 can read from their
phone
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phones
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 anywhere and anytime they want without worrying
bringing
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about bringing
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 heavy
books
 in their bags.
In addition
, most online
books
 are free on the internet
hence
 it makes
more
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them more
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 appealing.
For example
,
one
 of the applications on
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the Iphone
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Iphone
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iPhone
 called
Books
 has many different types of
literatures
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literature
kinds of literature
pieces of literature
works of literature
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 and
books
 that you can
access
 freely, so they just need
one
 mobile phone to read numerous
books
 with free
access
.
On the other hand
,
Libraries
 will have
few
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a few
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 problems from
this
 development
which
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apply
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one
 of them
are
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being
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less
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fewer
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 visitors
lead
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leading
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 to
closed
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apply
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permanently
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permanent
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. With long steps and efforts,
people
 have no interest
of
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in
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 physical
books
 in the
libraries
 because they need to go to the library, find and rent the
books
 if they want to continue reading the
books
.
Hence
, many
people
 choose to read from their
gadget
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gadgets
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 and rarely go to the
libraries
 which
make
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makes
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libraries
 become increasingly left behind and almost closed.
For example
,
City
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the City
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library
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Library
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 in
one
 of the cities in Indonesia, Medan Library,
lately
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was recently
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 closed because of the few visitors and the lack of facilities. In conclusion, e-
books
 may have many reasons for becoming more interesting for many
people
such
 as the
convinience
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convenience
 of
the
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apply
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access
while
 problems
are
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apply
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caused by
it
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apply
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to
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apply
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libraries
also
 increased.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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