The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The figure describes the approximate changes of three different kinds of metals throughout the
year
of
2014. At the beginning of 2014, the Change preposition
apply
price
of nickel
was the highest among the others, whilst the prices
of Fix the agreement mistake
price
zinc
was the lowest. However
, the chart differ at the
end
of the year
, the price
of nickel
was becoming the lowest price
and the prices
of Fix the agreement mistake
price
zinc
elevated, was
becoming Unnecessary verb
apply
te
highest Correct your spelling
the
price
compared to others.
The prices
of copper remain
quite stable Wrong verb form
have remained
since
Change preposition
from
January
2014 to the end
of 2014. A moderate drop happened starting from January
to May by 2%. However
, prices
did not change until June 2014. However
, a significant rose
to 1% Replace the word
rise
happened
in July and Verb problem
occurred
eventually
a plateau appeared throughout July to September 2014. Add a comma
eventually,
Furthermore
, there was a slight slumped
in October and November 2014 about 0,2%. Change the form of the verb
slump
Nevertheless
, a moderate increase happened at the
end
of the year
as it increased to 2%. On the other hand
, the prices
of nickel
had a dramatic fluctuation during 2014. Starting from January
to March 2014, the prices
of zinc
dramatically boomed to approximately 5%. As per
March to August 2014, it remained quite stable. Change preposition
of
Although
, in January
2014, the prices
had a significant drop to about -3%. Regardless on
the current position, It appeared that Change preposition
of
nickel
prices
had an enormous rose
to -1% as it remained stable for 3 months. Whilst Replace the word
rise
on
October there was a minimal Change preposition
in
dropped
, the Replace the word
drop
prices
of Fix the agreement mistake
price
nickel
managed to increased
about 3% in November and Change the verb
increase
remained
Verb problem
apply
plateau
in December 2014.
The Wrong verb form
plateaued
prices
of zinc
had a considerable fluctuation throughout the year
. It started on
2014, there was a marked Change preposition
in
rose
Replace the word
rise
about
2% in February 2014. Change preposition
of about
However
, the trend started to change since
March, as it moderately rose to -1% Change preposition
in
on
June 2014. There was a minimal increase Change preposition
in
on
July 2014, Whilst it remained stable until the Change preposition
in
end
of September 2014. Starting on
October 2014, the chart had changes as it increased to approximately 2% until the Change preposition
in
end
of the year
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, price, nickel, prices, zinc, end, january with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "plateau" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moderate" was used 3 times.
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