The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The figure describes the approximate changes of three different kinds of metals throughout the
year
of
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2014. At the beginning of 2014, the
price
of
nickel
was the highest among the others, whilst the
prices
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of
zinc
was the lowest.
However
, the chart differ
at the
end
of the
year
, the
price
of
nickel
was becoming the lowest
price
and the
prices
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of
zinc
elevated,
was
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becoming
te
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the
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highest
price
compared to others. The
prices
of copper
remain
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have remained
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quite stable
since
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January
2014 to the
end
of 2014. A moderate drop happened starting from
January
to May by 2%.
However
,
prices
did not change until June 2014.
However
, a significant
rose
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to 1%
happened
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in July and
eventually
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a plateau appeared throughout July to September 2014.
Furthermore
, there was a slight
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in October and November 2014 about 0,2%.
Nevertheless
, a moderate increase happened
at the
end
of the
year
as it increased to 2%.
On the other hand
, the
prices
of
nickel
had a dramatic fluctuation during 2014. Starting from
January
to March 2014, the
prices
of
zinc
dramatically boomed to approximately 5%. As
per
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March to August 2014, it remained quite stable.
Although
, in
January
2014, the
prices
had a significant drop to about -3%. Regardless
on
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the current position, It appeared that
nickel
prices
had an enormous
rose
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to -1% as it remained stable for 3 months. Whilst
on
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October there was a minimal
dropped
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, the
prices
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price
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of
nickel
managed to
increased
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about 3% in November and
remained
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in December 2014. The
prices
of
zinc
had a considerable fluctuation throughout the
year
. It started
on
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2014, there was a marked
rose
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about
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2% in February 2014.
However
, the trend started to change
since
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March, as it moderately rose to -1%
on
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June 2014. There was a minimal increase
on
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July 2014, Whilst it remained stable until the
end
of September 2014. Starting
on
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October 2014, the chart had changes as it increased to approximately 2% until the
end
of the
year
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, however".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, price, nickel, prices, zinc, end, january with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "plateau" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "moderate" was used 3 times.

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  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
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