Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

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These days, admission
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have become a necessity in a large number of museums,
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some of them do not need them. In my opinion, the former trend has more upsides as it can help these institutions to sustain and improve themselves. One of the main reasons that they should charge a fee for entry is to cover the costs of their upkeep.
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involves not only compensating the current staff
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as the conservators, curators and
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hiring new employees who can mend and renovate some of the older artworks. By doing
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, the museum will generally become more user-friendly, resulting in a better experience for the museum-goers. Paying for tickets could
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lead to higher-quality services. The funds generated
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way would definitely come in handy for purchasing state-of-the-art technology like projectors or VR headsets for a more immersive experience, which can
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render the exhibits and historical shows more dynamic.
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,
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policy can
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be destructive as some may say it will probably lead to exclusionary
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. Many individuals from
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socioeconomic backgrounds might not have the capacity to cover the costs of tickets to enter these cultural
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, even though they are often enthusiastic about being in a museum.
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, children who are brought up on
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dinosaur
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stories mostly long
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their fossils in person, and yet when they are told by their parents that it is impossible to do so
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the high prices of entry tickets, they will get disillusioned. For the same reason, there will normally be a decrease in attendance as these
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could be seen as deterrents.
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is like a large red sign that discourages potential visitors who are in their vicinity and
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no premeditated intention of entering these museums so as to become familiar with the history and culture of their country.
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,
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situation could be resolved by providing less well-to-do people free admission into these buildings
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or allowing visitors to put these
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on their credit. In conclusion, despite its
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prohibitive
impacts for certain
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groups
of people that can result in fewer people visiting museums, entry
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are very useful for maintaining them and enhancing the visitor experience.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Admission fee
  • Revenue stream
  • Maintenance
  • Overcrowding
  • Commercialization
  • Cultural heritage
  • Diverse attendance
  • Community ownership
  • Access to culture
  • Visitor experience
  • Exhibit quality
  • Cultural mission
  • Reliance on funding
  • Government subsidies
  • Cultural accessibility
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