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The table below shows the results of survey to find out what members of a city sports club think about the activities, facilities and opening hours.

The table below shows the results of survey to find out what members of a city sports club think about the activities, facilities and opening hours.
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The Table provides information on
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the response
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response
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responses
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 given by members of
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the
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sports
club
 to a feedback survey taken by the team about
facilities
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the facilities
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, activities and timings of the
club
.
Overall
, the table represents information in three different categories
such
 as very satisfied, satisfied and not satisfied marked by both male and female members of the fitness hub.
To begin
 with, there was
fluctuating
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a fluctuating
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response
 by both genders answering their satisfaction about different programmes organized at
club
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the club
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as well as
 time schedule of the
club
. It is apparent that 55%
males
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of males
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 were happy compared
only
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to only
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 35% of females agreeing about
activity
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the activity
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 range of
club
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the club
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.
Furthermore
, ladies (30%) of the
club
was
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were
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 mostly not
statisfied
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satisfied
 with the
activites
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activities
 arranged
whereas
 men (37%) having quite
disappointment
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disappointed
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 about
opening
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the opening
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 time of the
club
.
Moreover
, it is evident that most members had given positive
response
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responses
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over
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about
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 the amenities provided by the
club
. identical percentage(64% and 63%) of women and men shows highly
statisfied
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satisfied
response
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