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The pie chart compares the average household spending in two different countries in terms of five important categories in 2010.

The pie chart compares the average household spending in two different countries in terms of five important categories in 2010.
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The given pie charts illustrate the proportion of typical household
expenditure
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 spent on five clusters including Housing, Transport,
Food
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, Health care and other goods and services in Malaysia and Japan in the year 2010. Looking at the
overall
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 perspective, it is apparent that the most significant categories which Japanese people paid for were Housing and
Food
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, which together accounted for half the all
costs
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.
On the other hand
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, the
expenditure
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 on
Food
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 and Housing comprised more than 60% of the total payoff in Malaysia.
According to
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 Japan's pie chart, except for other goods and services which
was
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 the first rank with 29% of total
expenditure
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, the
costs
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 paid for
Food
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 stood second place at 24%, followed by both proportion of Housing and Transport clusters (21% and 20% respectively).
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, the
Health care
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healthcare
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 share in total
costs
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 was very tiny and equal to 6%.
On the other hand
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, the
costs
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 spent on Housing were considerable in Malaysia (34%), followed by
Food
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 and other goods and services both at almost just above one-fourth. Another cluster named Transport accounted for 10% of
expenditure
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 and similar to what can be seen in Japan's chart, Health care dedicated 3% of
costs
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 to itself which is a negligible amount
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, food, costs with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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