the map show school map in 1985 & now. describe it

The left map represents the school map in 1985

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the right one represents the current layout. Past and present common elements, albeit in different measures, include a car park, office, several classrooms, and playing fields.

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, there were major changes in the school over the years. From both pictures, one can observe that there are new features we can access,

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as a learning resources centre, a computer room which is part of the learning resources centre, a pool, a fitness centre, and some new classrooms that can accommodate more students. The map above

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shows the increase in school population from approximately 1500 students in 1985 to 2300 students as of now.

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, the position of the entrance and the exit remain the same,

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the shape of the car park went from a rectangular to a half circle.

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, we can see that the library, the car park, and the classrooms beside the library have been removed

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the playing fields have

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decreased in size.

helma.devina

Jan 16, 2024

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