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some people say that parents shouyld encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their free time. others say it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, the topic of taking part in group activity or performing
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 alone is in debate
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among
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while
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 half of
family
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the family
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support
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supports
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there
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their
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 children to
performe
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perform
 group work, on the other side
beleave
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believe
, doing work on himself is important. In
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notion
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i
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I
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 will
disscuss
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discuss
 both views and give my
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. To
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begin
 with,
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in
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 the
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modern
world
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 there are
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plenty
 of
socurces avaible
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sources available
 to
performed
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perform
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 any activity
by
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, by
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 using that children can learn or participate in it through
inperson
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in-person
 or online.
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,
spent
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 free time on productive
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alwayspayback
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always
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learing
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learning
 with other
learner
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learners
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alway
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always
help
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 to boost
confidance
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confidence
plus
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 learn how to
codinate
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coordinate
 with team members
along with
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help
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helps
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 to stay away from
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loneliness
.
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, working alone
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also
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is also
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 beneficial for
student
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students
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 to
built
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build
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a
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apply
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self confidence
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self-confidence
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 and stay focused on life without any
distraction
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distractions
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.
to
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To
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coclude
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conclude
,
learing
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learning
 from both
method
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methods
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are
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is
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 good
but
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, but
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student
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students
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 have to participate in both
two
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to
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mainted
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maintain
 the balance in life.

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planning
Plan your essay first with a simple plan. Say first you will talk about both views, then give your own view.
grammar
Use short, simple sentences. Each sentence says one idea.
coherence
Link ideas with easy words like and, but, however, also, so.
content
The writer tries to cover both sides and gives an opinion.
structure
There is an intro and a conclusion sentence, showing a plan.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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