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The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the world and in different continents. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the world and in different continents. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart illustrates the changes in
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
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population
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the population
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 in various urban
areas
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 and continents.
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, the percentage of
population
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 in urban
areas
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 will increase in the whole world, it is predicted that more than 60% will live in the urban area. The continent with the highest amount of percentage is North America, with a predicted 90% of its
population
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 living in urban
areas
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 by 2050.
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 in 1950, only 15% of the
Africa
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African
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population
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 lived in urban
areas
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, it is predicted by 2050, Africa will have 62% of its
population
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 living in urban
areas
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, making Africa have one of the most drastic changes.
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 is
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 the case with Asia, it started with 17% in 1950 and
predicted
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 to house 66% of its
poulation
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population
 in 2050. Meanwhile, a continent that has stayed consistent is Oceania as most of its
population
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had
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 lived in urban
areas
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 since 1950 and
its
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 predicted to increase.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, areas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Percentage (%)
  • Population
  • Continents
  • Developed vs Developing
  • Growth rate
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Technological factors
  • Infrastructure
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Anomalies
  • Trend
  • Projection
  • Implication
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