The chart below shows the Japan’s population by age groups starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2040.

The chart below shows the Japan’s population by age groups starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2040.
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The line graph gives information about Japan's population proportion by three age groups beginning in 1960 over the period of 80 years. Looking from an
overall
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perspective,
it is clear that
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the major part of the population consists of
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between 25 and 64 ages,
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figure fluctuates between 50 and 70 per cent. A deep analysis of the graph shows that in 2000 year in Japan citizens aged between 0 and 14 fell from 30% to 20%,
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, the indicator of 65+
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people
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experienced a slight increase from 5% to 15%.
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, the percentage of individuals between 25 and 64 ages remained stable, approximately 65%.
On the other hand
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, by 2040 the proportion of 65+
people
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will have risen to 35%,
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the figure of
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between 0 and 14 ages will witness a considerable decrease to 10%. At the same time, in 2040 citizens aged from 25 to 64 will see a slow drop to 55%.
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