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Although internet has some benefits yet its overuse has some negative impacts on human. Do you agree or disagree

#internet #overuse #impacts
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technology
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to technology
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 makes
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an affect
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affect
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for
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on
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people
for instance
internet
. There are many arguments about
advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages of the impact
internet
in
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on
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 our
life
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. I agree
with
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that
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the internets
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internets
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internet
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 has more positive benefits rather than negative
impact
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impacts
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. In
this
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eleborate
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elaborate
this
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on this
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 statement and
also
giving
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explanation
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an explanation
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. To first with,
Internet
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the Internet
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 has to provide fast information for
people
 all over the world. Nowadays, we can know anything around the world in a matter of seconds. We can get news so fast as soon as possible. the second is
internet
makes
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creates
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opportunity
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opportunities
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 for
people
get
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to get
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 new
occupation
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occupations
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.
For instance
,
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the seller
a seller
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seller
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sellers
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at
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in
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market
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the market
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 place, online freelance
designer
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designers
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, gaming players, and so on. it is not
actualy
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actually
 happen if
internet
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the internet
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 is not becoming a part of the world.
furthermore
,
internet
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the internet
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 can improve our development
education
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of education
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 in our country
such
 as access
of
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to
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 papers on research. There are so many advantages of
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the intenet
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intenet
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Internet
 in our
life
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lives
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,
instead
 use beneficial
internet
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for
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in
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positive
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a positive
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 way. there are always
people
also
 using
internet
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the internet
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 for doing crimes. For
exampe
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example
,
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 person
using
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uses
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internet
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the internet
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for hacking
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to hack
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 personal identity or
scaming
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scamming
people
 to
gaining
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gain
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 illegal money,
also
declare
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declaring
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 wrong information
in
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on
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 social media and so on.
However
,
negative
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the negative
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 impact
using
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of using
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internet
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the internet
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 can
we
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be
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decrease
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decreased
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with prevent
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by preventing
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 our personal information
such
 as safe our identity card or regularly change our
password
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passwords
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in
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apply
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all over
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the platform
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platform
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platforms
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 that we have. In conclusion, the
beneficial
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benefits
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 of
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the internets
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internets
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internet
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 are not inevitable.
However
, there
always
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are always
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human
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humans
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utilize
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who utilize
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internet
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the internet
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with
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in
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 negative ways. What we need to do
are
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is
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 protect our password from scammer
such
 as
change
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changing
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 our password regularly or
safe
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saving
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 our personal identity.
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coherence cohesion
The overall logical structure of the essay needs significant improvement. It is important to have a clear and logical flow of ideas throughout the essay. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that the supporting sentences are directly related to it. Additionally, use cohesive devices properly to link your ideas coherently.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are present but lack clear statements that define the aim of the essay or summarise its main points. Both your introduction and conclusion should clearly state your position on the topic. Make sure your conclusion echoes the sentiments expressed in the introduction and summarizes the main points of the essay effectively.
coherence cohesion
The essay provides main points, but they are not developed sufficiently with relevant and convincing explanations and examples. Expand on your ideas and provide concrete examples to back up your arguments. Support each claim with evidence or a detailed explanation to strengthen your essay's persuasiveness.
task achievement
Your essay is partially aligned with the task as it attempts to address the prompt. However, the response and ideas could be clearer and more comprehensive. Stick closely to the task requirements throughout your essay and ensure each paragraph is focused on addressing the prompt directly.
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Your essay includes some examples, but they are somewhat general and need to be more specific and clearly linked to the main ideas. Incorporate precise examples that are directly relevant to your points in order to substantiate your arguments and demonstrate an understanding of the topic.
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