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Band 4

Although internet has some benefits yet its overuse has some negative impacts on human. Do you agree or disagree

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technology
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to technology
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 makes
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an affect
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affect
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effect
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for
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on
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people
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for instance
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internet
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. There are many arguments about
advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages of the impact
internet
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in
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on
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 our
life
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lives
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. I agree
with
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that
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the internets
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internets
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internet
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 has more positive benefits rather than negative
impact
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impacts
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. In
this
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essay
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essay,
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eleborate
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elaborate
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this
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on this
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 statement and
also
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giving
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explanation
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an explanation
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. To first with,
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Internet
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the Internet
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 has to provide fast information for
people
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 all over the world. Nowadays, we can know anything around the world in a matter of seconds. We can get news so fast as soon as possible. the second is
internet
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makes
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creates
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opportunity
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opportunities
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 for
people
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get
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to get
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 new
occupation
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occupations
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.
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,
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the seller
a seller
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seller
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sellers
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at
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in
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market
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the market
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 place, online freelance
designer
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designers
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, gaming players, and so on. it is not
actualy
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actually
 happen if
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internet
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the internet
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 is not becoming a part of the world.
furthermore
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,
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internet
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the internet
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 can improve our development
education
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of education
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 in our country
such
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 as access
of
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to
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 papers on research. There are so many advantages of
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the intenet
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intenet
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Internet
 in our
life
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lives
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,
instead
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 use beneficial
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internet
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Internet
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for
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in
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positive
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a positive
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 way. there are always
people
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also
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 using
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internet
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the internet
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 for doing crimes. For
exampe
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example
,
This
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 person
using
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uses
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internet
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the internet
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for hacking
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to hack
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 personal identity or
scaming
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scamming
people
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 to
gaining
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gain
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 illegal money,
also
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declare
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declaring
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 wrong information
in
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on
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 social media and so on.
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,
negative
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the negative
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 impact
using
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of using
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internet
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the internet
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 can
we
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be
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decrease
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decreased
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with prevent
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by preventing
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 our personal information
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 as safe our identity card or regularly change our
password
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passwords
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in
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apply
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all over
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the platform
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platform
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platforms
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 that we have. In conclusion, the
beneficial
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benefits
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 of
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the internets
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internets
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internet
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 are not inevitable.
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, there
always
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are always
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human
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humans
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utilize
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who utilize
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internet
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the internet
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with
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in
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 negative ways. What we need to do
are
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is
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 protect our password from scammer
such
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 as
change
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changing
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 our password regularly or
safe
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saving
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 our personal identity.

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coherence cohesion
The overall logical structure of the essay needs significant improvement. It is important to have a clear and logical flow of ideas throughout the essay. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that the supporting sentences are directly related to it. Additionally, use cohesive devices properly to link your ideas coherently.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are present but lack clear statements that define the aim of the essay or summarise its main points. Both your introduction and conclusion should clearly state your position on the topic. Make sure your conclusion echoes the sentiments expressed in the introduction and summarizes the main points of the essay effectively.
coherence cohesion
The essay provides main points, but they are not developed sufficiently with relevant and convincing explanations and examples. Expand on your ideas and provide concrete examples to back up your arguments. Support each claim with evidence or a detailed explanation to strengthen your essay's persuasiveness.
task achievement
Your essay is partially aligned with the task as it attempts to address the prompt. However, the response and ideas could be clearer and more comprehensive. Stick closely to the task requirements throughout your essay and ensure each paragraph is focused on addressing the prompt directly.
task achievement
Your essay includes some examples, but they are somewhat general and need to be more specific and clearly linked to the main ideas. Incorporate precise examples that are directly relevant to your points in order to substantiate your arguments and demonstrate an understanding of the topic.
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