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Students should focus on learning in the classroom rather than show their status by wearing fashionable clothes. Thebefore, all students have to wear school uniforms.

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Introduction
Juvenails
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Juveniles
emphasis
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on
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apply
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learning
on
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in
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classroon
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classroom
 rather than
fashon
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fashion
 dress.all learners must wear
school
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 uniforms.I
compleately
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completely
 agree with the
notio
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notion
 and the reasons for
myopinion
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my opinion
 will
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 in
forthcoming
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a forthcoming
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 paragraph with relevant illustrations.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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 with, unifrm is
an
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the
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 identity of
students
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.especially in outside
curarriculam easly
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curriculum easily
identify
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identifies
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ecah
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each
school
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students
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.
it
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provide
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 equality
of
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for
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students
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.
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for
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 instance, rich and poor
students
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 are learning same
school
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.there is no discrimination
using
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in using
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uniform
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uniforms
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.
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Moreover
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low income
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low-income
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 parents have
burden
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a burden
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usin
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using
us in
fashonable
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fashionable
cloths
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clothes
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 as well
sudents
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students
spent
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spend
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 more time for their shopping .They could not
concerate
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concentrate
their
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on their
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 education.in
recent
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a recent
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study
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study,
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China
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Chinese
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 and
japan
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Japanese
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school
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stdent
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student
students
 must wear
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uniform
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uniforms
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 from one to
twelth
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twelfth
 standard .
Body paragraph 2
on the other hand
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,some
students
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 are not comfort their
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uniforms
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uniform
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.They could not
decision take
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decide
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 to select
convenient
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a convenient
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uniform
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.so
thet
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they
y
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were
 distracted in
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the class
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class room
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classroom
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.
especialy
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especially
 girls
are faced
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have faced
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this
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with this
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 problem.
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school
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School
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 is
noyt
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not
show
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a show
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 of place.it is valuable for learning.
Conclusion
To conclude
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,
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uniform
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the uniform
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 is more suitable for
students
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 in
school
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 rather than fashion
cloths
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clothes
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.

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task response
Ensure that your essay has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. You should clearly state your opinion in the introduction, develop your argument with supported main points in the body, and then summarize your views in the conclusion, keeping everything relevant to the question.
coherence cohesion
Your essay should flow logically from one idea to the next, using cohesive devices such as pronouns, conjunctions, and linking words effectively. It's also essential to maintain paragraphing, with one main idea per paragraph and clear topic sentences.
language
Proofread your work to correct grammatical errors and improve lexical resource by using a greater range of vocabulary. Additionally, work on sentence complexity and variety to enhance readability.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic focus
  • fashion trends
  • peer pressure
  • social class disparities
  • disciplinary environment
  • cost-effective
  • school identity
  • sense of belonging
  • individual expression
  • dress codes
  • professional attire
  • body types
  • school spirit
  • creativity suppression
  • equal footing
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