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The diagrams below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year

The diagrams below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year
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The two maps compare the layout of an airport in the Southwest in the present
to
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apply
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and the plan one year ahead.
Overall
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, it is evident that the airport has fewer
gates
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 and facilities currently which will be added in the following year. The airport had only one door each for the entrance of departures and arrivals. There are a few facilities on
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the departures
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departures sides
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departure side
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such
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 as a check-in counter which will be moved to the opposite of where it is located. The additional facility
such
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 as bag drop area will be developed too in the departures
while
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 the cafe will be moved near to it.
A new facilities
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New facilities
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 will be added
are
Unnecessary verb
apply
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bag drop next to password control customs, ATM, and car hire, respectively. On the other side of password
control
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control,
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 there was a footpath to the eight
gates
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 of the airports. The passengers could take a walkway built there to
gates
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 that run through
gate
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gates
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 one, two and three.
This
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 walkway will be demolished and changed to sky trains in the middle of the
walk
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walking
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 path to the
gates
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.The
gates
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 will be increased to 18
gates
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 with two tracks, divided for
gate
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gates
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 three to nine and ten to sixteen.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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