The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar graph compares the proportion of
men
and
women
in Australia among seven different occupations in the year 2023. It's obvious that the number of males in most of the above jobs surpasses that of females,especially tradespersons work almost monopolized by
men
.
while
there were two of them,professionals and clerical,in which females were more than males.
According to
the occupational data,the biggest sexual gap was tradespersons,in which
men
employed were nine times as many as
women
'.Next came managers and production,which showed
men
were three times and five times more than
women
respectively.At the same time,there were the same patterns for semi-professionals and labourers that
men
were a little bit more than
women
.
On the contrary
, female workers were more interested in being professionals and clerical.
Women
clerical which was
also
the most popular job in Australia, was slightly more than
men
,nearly by 50.
while
the proportion of females as professionals was
also
a little bit higher than that of males ,by almost 40.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment figures
  • Sectors
  • Significant disparities
  • Gender balance
  • Skewed
  • Trends
  • Patterns
  • Dominant
  • Inferred
  • Labor market
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Insights
  • Implications
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