The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar graph compares the proportion of
men
and women
in Australia among seven different occupations in the year 2023.
It's obvious that the number of males in most of the above jobs surpasses that of females,especially tradespersons work almost monopolized by men
.while
there were two of them,professionals and clerical,in which females were more than males.
According to
the occupational data,the biggest sexual gap was tradespersons,in which men
employed were nine times as many as women
'.Next came managers and production,which showed men
were three times and five times more than women
respectively.At the same time,there were the same patterns for semi-professionals and labourers that men
were a little bit more than women
.
On the contrary
, female workers were more interested in being professionals and clerical. Women
clerical which was also
the most popular job in Australia, was slightly more than men
,nearly by 50.while
the proportion of females as professionals was also
a little bit higher than that of males ,by almost 40.Submitted by andy8610181018 on
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