the table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufactures in the tears 2006 and 2007

the table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufactures in the tears 2006 and 2007
The table given illustrates how much the notebook computer’s
market
share
for seven manufacturers between 2006 and 2007, measured by percentage.
Overall
, HP commended the
market
share
over the period,
while
Fujitsu-Siemens did the reverse.
Initially
, only HP had a
market
share
of over a quarter,
while
others had below.
Furthermore
, there was a small percentage which was under about 7% occupied by Toshiba, Lenovo, and Fujitsu-Siemens. Eventually, the others category occupied the second stage in the first period at 22.8%, but in the following years decreased to 19.3%, being the third level.
However
, Fujitsu-Siemens had a negative experience in 2007 decreasing by 2.5%, taking the lowest proportion.
Moreover
, the rate
market
share
of HP and Dell climbed to 34% and 20.2%, respectively.
Nevertheless
, Acer decreased slightly at a small rate, but it had a higher proportion than Toshiba and Lenovo did in which they had 7.3% for the former and 6.2 (%) for the latter.
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