Some people like to travel to somewhere new and different when they go on holiday, while others prefer familiar places? Do you think there are more advantages or disadvantages to visiting new places ?

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prefer to go on
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trip
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to somewhere new or
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place
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that has been changed, at the same time some others choose to go on
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holiday
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of communication
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should go on vacations around new places and new cultures.
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number of
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like to go on
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trip
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during the holidays.
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is because for some
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place
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and locals
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matter. They just want to relax and enjoy, going to
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is
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also
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have
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benefits for
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a traveler
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traveler
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like they know a lot about the
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local
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, restaurants and hotels.
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means that they don’t get scammed like paying over the price, and another one of the examples that, is not getting lost. There will be always pros and cons, one of the biggest cons about going on
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vacation is not
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or
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new things.
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some others like to go on vacation to new places. Best advantages
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fresh location. Is
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able to improve networking skills, by chatting with locals, getting
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people
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around them,
builds
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person’s
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a person’s
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confidence and
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them to
making
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new friends.
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means that
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it opens opportunities to learn more about their culture.
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one of the big cons
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trip
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a trip
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to
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location is culture shock, by getting
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with locals might be the solution
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the problem. Many
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like to arrange trips to new places or the
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that unlike to
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they went
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time number of
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like to go on
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to
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coherence cohesion
Your essay would benefit significantly from a clearer and more logical structure. It is important to use clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph, followed by supporting sentences, and a concluding sentence that links back to the question. This ensures that your argument is easy to follow and coherent to the reader. Additionally, using transitional phrases to connect ideas between sentences and paragraphs can create a better flow.
task achievement
While you addressed the task prompt, the response could be more fully developed. Be sure to directly answer the question posed by clearly stating if there are more advantages or disadvantages to visiting new places, and providing balanced arguments for both sides before reaching a conclusion. This will demonstrate a complete understanding and engagement with the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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