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The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents.

The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents.
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The bar chart shows the average
number
 of
car
 journeys into the downtown created by local and
non- local
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non-local
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 people between 1996 and 2005.
Overall
, it can be seen that the
number
 of
resident`s
car
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cars
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deacreased
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decreased
decreases
,
however
number
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a number
the number
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 of
non-
resident`s
car
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cars
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 fluctuated over the period. In 1996
number
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a number
the number
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 of
car
 journeys into the city centre made by
resident`s
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residents
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 stood at approximately 10000, which was twice as much as
non-
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a non-resident`s
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resident`s
car
. Until 1996
number
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the number
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 of
resident`s
car
number
 of
resident`s
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residents
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car
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cars
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slighty
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slightly
 fluctuated to 9500,
while
 the
number
 of
non-
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non-residents
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resident`s
car
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cars
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 significantly increased
almost
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by almost
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 8200. Between 2000 and 2002
number
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a number
the number
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 of local people`s
car
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cars
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 dramatically dropped and fluctuated around 5000 over the period.
In contrast
,
number
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a number
the number
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 of non-local people`s
car
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cars
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 stabled at the same time. From 2003 to 2005
number
 of
resident`s
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residents
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 and
non-
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non-residents
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resident`s
 journeys
car
 decreased, because
Wastgate
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Westgate
 Street and Park Lane
closed
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were closed
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 to traffic.
Number
 of
resident`s
car
 was 4000, which was 1000 less than
non-
resident`s
car
at the end
or
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of
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 the period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, car, resident`s, non-resident`s with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 11 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • residents
  • non-residents
  • urban planning
  • traffic management
  • regulate
  • measures
  • impact
  • increase
  • decrease
  • compare
  • explore
  • evaluate
  • potential
  • journey
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