Nowadays many people commit crime What are reasons? What are solutions

At present,
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number of
people
tend to commit
crime
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due to
various reasons
However
, certain actions can be taken to tackle
this
issue. In
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essay, I plan to explain why
people
commit
crime
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and provide logical solutions. The main factor which
cause
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people
to
coming
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commit
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crime
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crimes
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is poverty. Since
people
cannot afford to buy basic needs
such
as food and clothing, they commit
crime
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to cover their expenses. A good example
for
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this
is burglary which is common
amount
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homeless
people
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task achievement
The essay needs a complete introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. The current text is unfinished and does not cover all required aspects of the question.
task achievement
The response must fully address all parts of the task. The essay prompt asks for reasons and solutions to the problem of crime, but the essay only begins to discuss reasons and does not propose any solutions.
coherence cohesion
Improve coherence by ensuring your essay has a clear logical structure. This includes using paragraphs effectively to separate your ideas clearly.
coherence cohesion
Support main points with more detailed explanations and relevant examples. If you mention burglary, explain why it is common among homeless people with supporting details or evidence.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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