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The bar charts below provide information about percentages of students who are proficient in foreign language in different countries.

The bar charts below provide information about percentages of students who are proficient in foreign language in different countries.
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The chart shows data about percentages of students' fluency in foreign
language
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languages
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 in six different nations.
Overall
, the students either male
and
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or
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 female from India can speak most in
abroad
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the abroad
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language
, followed by Romanian, Vietnam, Russia, Thailand and China. The trends of each country
signifies
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 that female speaks proficiently in foreign
language
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languages
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,
exclude
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excluding
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 Thailand. To specify these
learners
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 gender, it is found that men in India are multi-lingual by recording roughly 55%, followed by
Romanian's
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Romanian
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language
enthusiast
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enthusiasts
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 with slightly over 40%,
meanwhile
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 almost under 40% of male speakers
that
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apply
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likes to engage outside their native languages come from Vietnam, Russia and Thailand
thus
 leaving China in
last
 position by recording less than 20%. In
girls'
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the girls'
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 category, India leads the percentage
from
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of
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 all countries participating with around 68%, slightly over
than
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apply
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Romania with
estimated
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an estimated
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 65%, and third by Vietnam
around
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at around
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 58%. The other countries maintain their positions
in
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from
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 42% to slightly under 30%.
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