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In some countries, Many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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It is believed that numerous individuals are living separately today than in the past.
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 merits and downsides too. To commence with, living alone provides mankind
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sense of freedom and enhances personal &
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 growth. Individuals will learn the essential basic needs of living
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 as cooking,
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cleaning and
 doing chores accompanied with studying or working.
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, facing many challenges and hardships in life will make them even more stronger and resilient.
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self reliant
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 people are more likely to build
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 business empire of their own despite
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 in life and have more prosperity and stability.
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 impact on mental and emotional health. A number of men and women who reside alone in the cities have inadequate physical and emotional support
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 their parents
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and have to rely on themselves . If they ever get
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 or drained emotionally
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, they will not get the love, care and help from their parents at that time, which ultimately suffering.
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 dwellers have to pay their bills, purchase groceries
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, utilize transportation and take health care services without
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 support,
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 financial burden on individuals residing alone. Several studies
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 shown that participants who had dwelled
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 to develop anxiety, depression and bipolar manic disorder. In Conclusion, trending of
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solo
 has both benefits and drawbacks equally by making a person's career successful to leading mental degradation and I believe that major efforts
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 to be made to solve the individual issues
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