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The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Machester city centre from 2003-2012.

The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Machester city centre from 2003-2012.
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The line graph illustrates the difference in
burglary
, car theft, and robbery in
city
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the city
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 centre of Manchester between 2003 and 2012.
Overall
it is clear that
initially
cases
 related to
burglary
was
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were
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 highest but declined in later years
whereas
 robbery
cases
 were the lowest and
not
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did not
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much
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have much
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 difference throughout
year
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the year
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. The car theft
cases
 increased which replaced the
burglary
. In 2004, the
burglary
cases
 were increased around 3800 but showed a sudden decrease till 2008.
Then
,
since
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from
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 2009 to 2012, the
cases
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case
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 number
not
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has not
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 changed from 1500.
On the other hand
, the number of car
theft
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thefts
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 were
initially
 decreased till 2006 from 2400 to 2000
whereas
 a dramatic
rose
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rise
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 in
number
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a number
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 of
cases
 from 2000 to 2800 in the
last
year
.
In contrast
, the robbery
cases
 from
first
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the first
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year
 were just above 500 and in the final
year
 were
also
same
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the same
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 which had
no
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not
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 much differences and they were
least
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the least
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 numbers of
cases
 in Manchester.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "initially, whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words burglary, cases, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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