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The rise of social media has affected personal, relationships and society as a whole. Do the advantages of using social media for communication outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, the development of social
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 have a big impact on personal ,
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 and communication.
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 that
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 of beautifying
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 and keeping
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 on social
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 to
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. The most
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advantageous
 factor is that the rise of social
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 on the
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 of technology devices . With the
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modern
 world , it can be seen that more and more apps by Facebook,
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 or Youtube . It has
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 people who need to
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 for the information of details with new knowledge.
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, the authority of Japan summarize
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the rate of
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teenager who
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all of
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 for 90%.
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coherence cohesion
It is critical to maintain a clear and logical structure throughout the essay. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea supported by relevant elaborations.
coherence cohesion
Ensure an introduction and conclusion are included in the essay. The introduction should present the topic, and the conclusion should summarize the main points and restate the writer's position in a clear manner.
coherence cohesion
Develop each main point with clear support and relevant examples. Ideas should be fully explained and exemplified to strengthen the argument or viewpoint.
task achievement
The response should be complete, answering all parts of the task. The writer should spend time making sure their position is clear and that they have addressed both the advantages and disadvantages of social media.
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Ideas should be expressed clearly and explained comprehensively. Avoid vague statements and ensure the clarity of thought is evident throughout the essay.
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Use relevant and specific examples to support your points. Make sure the examples clearly relate to the topic and are detailed enough to substantiate your arguments.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global connectivity
  • networking opportunities
  • real-time information
  • community building
  • marketing opportunities
  • self-expression
  • educational content
  • privacy concerns
  • data security
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • cyberbullying
  • interpersonal skills
  • distraction
  • productivity
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