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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. https://ieltsonlinetests.com/sites/default/files/2020-12/2.jpg

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. https://ieltsonlinetests.com/sites/default/files/2020-12/2.jpg
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The picture illustrates the changes in cutting tools between
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 A as a cutting
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 1.4
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years
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 ago and
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 B as a cutting
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 0.8
million
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years
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 ago. In general, these tools had some significant changes
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 their appearance, But regarding the height,
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 A and
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 B stayed at the same size which is 5cm. 1.4
million
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years
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 ago, the cutting
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 seemed like a basic shape following the shape of the original stone.
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 A's front and back views seemed like rough textures, whilst the wide was
also
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 quite bold. The tip of
this
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 looked not sharp enough. After 0.6
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years
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, the cutting
tool
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 has developed its appearance and its function has become better.
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 B’s texture looked smooth and its width was slimmer.
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, the back texture had a different texture from the front side, it could be following the shape of the user's hand, and the tip was
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 sharper, by
then
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this
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 was more comfortable and effective to use as a cutting
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tool, million, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Stone Age
  • Cutting tools
  • Evolution
  • Flint
  • Chipping
  • Hand axe
  • Sharp edge
  • Craftsmanship
  • Hunting
  • Survival
  • Innovation
  • Cognitive abilities
  • Early humans
  • Technological advancements
  • Tool-making techniques
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