The table below gives information about a restaurant’s average sales in three different branches in 2016.

The table below gives information about a restaurant’s average sales in three different branches in 2016.
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The table below depicts the average sales of three different
branch
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of a restaurant
in
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three different
Vancouver
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streets in 2016. As can be
seen
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the
Chicken
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burger,
Chicken
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Wings and
Chicken
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Pasta are the most popular items in these three branches. First of
all
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we can mention that
,
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the highest
transaction
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number of transactions
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belongs to
Vancouver
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Georgia
Street
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with 854 transactions. And the lowest transaction belongs to
Vancouver
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Dark
Street
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. And
the
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last
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of all we can note that
,
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the cheapest transaction is in
Vancouver
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Dunsmuir
Street
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with
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5.61 dollars and the other two branches are more expensive
with
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9.02 and 10.69 dollars respectively.
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the
Chicken
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burger in
Vancouver
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Georgia
Street
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is the most popular item amongst the other items and branches.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words vancouver, chicken, street with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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